This land within

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Dverse – Haibun Monday — Making Way
This land within.

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There’s movement out there in the valley. The snow-covered valley, Asleep under snowy blanket. Coming awake, shivering, in this new inner land. In this land that is your land. Coming awake, in this new inner land. In this land that is my land. Your love never truly mine.

There’s movement out there in the valley. The sun-bleached valley desolate. Asleep under a myriad of stars we once shared, now my pals. This land within now just memories of the love we shared and lost. This is now my land alone, not longer your land. Mine to share with those in my future.

Movement in the valley,
Asleep under snowy blanket,
Coming awake, shivering,
Heart-broken and alone,
Your love never truly mine.

Sun bleached valley, desolate.
Myriad of stars now my pals,
Mine to share with the future.

Movement in this land,
Asleep under white blanket,
Stars for my future.
© 06/01/2025 rog leach

wow what an interesting form. thanks Lisa @ #dversepoetspub. I have gone with a double prompt here. one of the writers groups I am a part off challenged us to write a piece to include the lines “In this land that is your land. In this land that is my land.” which is a song lyric the song title and singer I cannot recall. but whoever’s it is thank you.

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22 thoughts on “This land within”

  1. Rog, the first thing I noticed were the small figures upon the landscape of your image. The way you cut up the scene adds to the message of your Burning Haibun. I really enjoyed how you turned the stars into your friends to go forth into the future with. The song, “This Land is Your Land,” is written by Woody Guthrie. Not sure if you got a chance to see the new movie about Bob Dylan, “A Complete Unknown” but I think Edward Norton, the guy who plays Pete Seeger in the movie, sings it.

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  4. Nicely done, Rog, and well done for the combination of prompts. Your opening lines gave me an additional chill on a very cold day, and I love the haiku.

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  7. There is nothing more beautiful than being in complete sync with a myriad of stars. Love this haibun 💙💙

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