tonight on https://dversepoets.com/2021/03/16/poetics-the-art-of-being-human/ we have been prompted by kimm881 to write a metphor poem starting with the line “This being humn is ” from the poem the guest house by romi.
This being human is an abyss.
We stare down our own,
Looking for the rocks at the bottom,
Finding just emptiness,
Filled with infinite blackness,
Even when seen rose tinted specs.
This being human is a void,
Full of raw emotion,
Love, hate, guilt, fear, greed etc. etc. etc
Shouting for attention,
Wanting and demanding closure,
As we toss them into darkness’s depth,
Before we follow to our end
Not knowing if we go to our end
or our own creation,
to this being human malarky.
© rogleach 16/3/2021
That’s very profound. We are always demanding closure (and explanations) but in the end we go to who knows what – our ending or our beginning.
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Whoa! Abyss-mal, I guess?
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Ironically I have been accused of wearing those rose colored glasses you speak of. Your poem seems so sad to me.
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Echoing sadness.
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I love the way your poem start darkly, staring into the abyss and ‘Finding just emptiness, / Filled with infinite blackness’, shifts a little with the ‘rose tinted specs’, returns to the dark side, and then makes me smile at the end with that ironic word ‘malarky’!
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I think as long as you know where the edge to the darkness is we can stay there above… it’s when we lose contral that we fall into the abyss.
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This is incredibly deep and evocative. I especially admire; “We stare down our own, looking for the rocks at the bottom, finding just emptiness, filled with infinite blackness, even when seen rose tinted specs.” 💝💝
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It feels like a place with so much emptiness but it is also filled with so much. A void and an attachment (to all of those emotions) feels like a contradiction but only from this perspective.
Maybe there’s another way around or some mountains in the vicinity for a change of scenery?
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I am looking will let you know when i find it
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So poignant and profound. We can be all these things and even insouciant in our own ways.
“This being human is a void,
Full of raw emotion,
Love, hate, guilt, fear, greed etc. etc. etc”
This speaks so much truth about what is beyond the surface of humans; the good and evil, the morally gray, the fears, the guilt, and so many more things we feel or have made others feel. Brilliantly written and stunning!
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Humanity as malarky, certain seems that way at times.
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Thank you guys for taking the time out to read
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Some days are definitely like this!
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Life is filled with ups and downs – hopefully, light will fill the voids of darkness…
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