Looking Back

poetry and short stories 1 Minute

for MTB ON AT #dversepoespub we are looking at palinode

https://dversepoets.com/2021/05/06/mtb-palinode/

the origanal poem i am reacting to with my palinoden is envious eyes link below.

Envious Eyes

LOOKING BACK (a pallinode)

LOOKING BACK at how I was

Mixed up and confuddled

About my father’s alcoholism

I almost followed suit

While watching with envious eyes

Of others money and success

Now I know that my

Pockets contain words of poetry

I no longer look through wardrobe doors

with envy at the greedy

©6/5/2021 rogleach

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9 thoughts on “Looking Back”

  1. Striking, and an interesting dynamic with the change in perspective and intent. Cleverly done, with delicious notes of pain.

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  2. I so admire the twist in the story. What could have been due to envy but I gather that you saved yourself. I love this reveal:

    my pockets contain words of poetry

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  3. I like both poems, Rog, but especially your recantation. Sounds as though you have arrived at a conclusion which will lead to a much happier, more satisfying life!

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  4. Rog,
    The palinode just sings with pockets full of the poetry of words! Love the wardrobe image in both poems — that closeted desire, envy, greed that traps in self-defeating habits — and in the palinode becomes merely the vestige or the grave of the past.
    ~🕊Dora

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  5. What a compelling palinode. The lines ‘my Pockets contain words of poetry’ is a wonderful image.

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